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Chapter 104 Modifying the novel [Please give me a free P! 】

"The immortal breaks the world?"

Fang Bai looked at the title of the manuscript and murmured.

I was suddenly shocked, how could this be...

Then he continued to read.

[There has never been an immortal in the mortal world for thousands of years. People’s concepts of immortality only exist on paper. 】

【Does this immortal exist? 】

【No one knows. 】

[In this mortal world, in the northwest, there is a place called Xuanxian City, and the Xiao family inside is undergoing a talent test! 】

……

Fang Bai slowly followed the story.

The more he looked, the more frightened he became, and the more he looked, the more he felt...

Isn't this the fairy version of "Dou Po"? !
But because it was just written, the writing style is still immature, and the settings inside are not perfect enough.

Li Shiguang wrote nearly two chapters, but these two chapters haven't explained the prelude to the story, which is obviously a bit procrastinated.

There seemed to be something wrong with Li Guangguang's expression when he looked at the teacher, especially as the more he looked at it, the deeper his frown became...

"Teacher, am I not good at writing?"

Li Shiguang asked in a low voice.

Fang Bai was silent for a while and shook his head.

"teacher……"

Li Guangguang stood beside Fang Bai politely.

"Overall, no problem..."

"but!"

"The rhythm is still not grasped!"

Fang Bai's words made Li Shiguang feel like he was on a roller coaster, going up and down...

"Also ask the teacher to give pointers!"

Li Shiguang said seriously.

"First of all, there is no need to explain the nonsense mentioned above!"

Fang Bai took a red pen and drew a big cross directly on the front of Li Guangguang's manuscript.

"What is the purpose of explaining this? Is it to let readers understand the background?"

"Background is sometimes an element that creates a sense of expectation. If you explain these clearly at the beginning, what if new elements are added when writing later? Do you need to modify the settings?"

"So you can skip writing these backgrounds and just write the story directly!"

What Fang Bai said was clear and logical.

You ask him why he does this?

What’s more, I haven’t read too much. I read so many classic novels in my previous life, and the routines in any book are still popular now...

Still the same sentence, have you never eaten pork or seen a pig run?
After watching so many teacher movies, isn’t it normal to learn a few tricks?
Li Guangguang quickly took out his exclusive notebook and recorded it.

"For example, in your paragraph, you directly remove the background and characters. The opening sentence is: spiritual power, low level!"

"Then I write it again. The young man looks at his test results and laughs at himself, feels unwilling and even despairs!"

"The tribe announced the test results, and the protagonist was ridiculed!"

"Let's look at what you wrote about "The Good-for-Nothing Boy's Counterattack." Think about it, if you wrote it like this, would others have any expectations?"

"And this good-for-nothing boy counterattacked. What does counterattack mean? He just counterattacked because others looked down on him, right?"

"Why do you look down on him? Think about it, isn't it normal for you to look down on a classmate in your class who has always had poor grades? Since it is a normal thing, will readers have any sense of expectation?"

"So, next, we have to create suspense. How to create suspense?"

"Through the ridicule of the people around me, let me tell you another thing, that is, the protagonist was originally a genius boy, but he didn't know what caused him to become a waste!"

"Look, does the suspense come all at once?"

"Are readers also curious about why the protagonist became a waste?"

Fang Bai picked up the pen and began to rewrite Li Guangguang's manuscript at will.

The more Li Shiguang listened, the more he felt that what Teacher Fang said made sense.

"Thank you teacher for the pointer!"

Li Shiguang said while writing down what Fang Bai said. "fine!"

Fang Bai calmly returned the manuscript in his hand to Li Guangguang, looking calm...

It gives Li Shiguang the feeling of an outsider in martial arts novels.

Just listening to what Teacher Fang said, Li Guangguang had a feeling of enlightenment. No wonder Teacher Fang could write such a great novel as "Ghost Blowing the Lamp".

"Thank you, teacher, I'll go back and revise it right now!"

Li Shiguang was so excited that he couldn't help himself. He picked up the manuscripts that were regarded as treasures, and even the strength of holding the manuscripts was much lighter. He decided to treasure these manuscripts...

"Don't be in a hurry, take your time, a good novel takes time to polish!"

Fang Bai smiled lightly.

Li Shiguang suddenly felt that Teacher Fang's image had grown taller, and he even walked a lot more briskly. He couldn't wait to return to his position to revise the novel.

Qin Meng watched this scene, she bit her lip, she just felt that Fang Bai was too good, so good that she didn't seem to be worthy of him...

"Daughter-in-law, why are you looking at me like this? Are there any flowers on my face?"

Seeing Qin Meng staring at him.

Fang Bai touched his face strangely.

"No……"

Qin Meng quickly denied it.

"Then why are you looking at me like that? I'm telling you, don't mess around. In broad daylight, in public..."

Fang Bai joked seriously.

Qin Meng: "..."

Why is this person so bad!

Qin Meng sometimes feels that Fang Bai is really bad, worse than a bad person!

"The law stipulates that a woman's will cannot be violated, otherwise it is a violation of the law, daughter-in-law, I advise you to take care of yourself and don't mess around. If you really want to mess around, please don't pity me..."

Fang Bai caressed his exposed shoulders wantonly.

Qin Meng: "..."

She picked up a book on the table angrily and threw it towards Fang Bai.

"What are you doing, do you want to murder your husband? If I die, you will be a widow, do you know that?"

Fang Bai caught the flying book, and taught Qin Meng a serious lesson.

"You still say you still say!"

Qin Meng threw a few more books in anger.

"Okay, okay, I won't say it anymore, I won't say it anymore!"

Fang Bai saw that Qin Meng was really angry and quickly slipped out of the office.

"Humph!"

"Let you talk nonsense!"

Qin Meng looked at Fang Bai who was running away in a hurry, and put down the book in his hand very proudly.

After Fang Bai left the office, he came outside the class. At this time, the students were studying by themselves.

He stood in the corridor, looking at the night scene...

Unknowingly, it has been almost more than a month since he traveled back in time.

But in more than a month, a lot of things happened.

I have to take care of these old classmates every day and deal with school affairs.

Sometimes...

"Teacher Fang?"

Just when Fang Bai was deep in thought, a voice suddenly sounded from behind him.

Fang Bai twitched in shock... Of course, it was either a twitch or a fright.

"Mo...Mo Die?"

Fang Bai had an awkward smile on his face.

　Five more sent!

　　Let’s try it tomorrow and come back for the fifth update!
　　Including the chapter sent this morning, six chapters have been updated.

　　All in all, I also had an erection once!
　　That's right, please call me thick taro in the future!
　　
　
(End of this chapter)